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Script/Movie: Johnny’s Commercial

“Do you struggle every time when you break your pencil.” I ask.
“Well don’t struggle any more with my newest lead pencil.” I said.
“With this lead pencil I do better in school.”
“Call now and you get not one but two lead pencils.”I said .
“Must be 18 or older to order.” I said.
“Call 1-800-567-849.” I said.

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11 Comments

  1. It was really good acting but the effect didn’t need to be throughout the whole movie. Also he could have explained why we should buy a pencil.Why was there a skeleton in the movie?

  2. I counldn’t see the sign. Why didn’t you tell why we should buy it? I liked when Benjamin opened eyes. That was really funny. Great expression.

  3. Johnny you don’t have to use that special effect through out the duration of the movie,other than that it was a good movie.

  4. I thought it was good. You did miss a lot of stuff. I couldn’t see the sign. You need to work on that.

  5. You wrote the words too light, so I couldn’t read your banner. Why didn’t you tell why we should buy that mechanical pencil.

  6. Great commercial! that was pretty good and funny. but why was there a skeloton in the video?

  7. The music fits in great!
    Benjiman’s face is always funny!
    You should not have use that effect.

  8. I think you both have great expressions on your lines and face. But why did you make it like an old movie/comercial?

  9. It was a good movie and it had alot of expression.But you shouldnt’ve used that effect because you can’t see the sign.And why was there a skeleton at the end?

  10. “Do you struggle every time when you break your pencil.” I ask.
    “Well don’t struggle any more with my newest lead pencil.” I said
    “With this lead pencil I do better in school.”
    “Call now and you get not one but two lead pencils.”I said
    “Must be 18 or older to order.” I said
    “Call 1-800-567-849.” I said

  11. I thought the actors were enthusiastic and did a good job. I thought the effect was interesting at first, but then found that it to be distracting. I agree that you could have explained more about how the lead pencil will make life better.

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