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  1. I liked that you both had attitude and emotion. On some of the scenes the camera was moving. The best part about it was the music choice and the narration. Also it was much better than your first movie but I’m not saying that your first movie was bad.

    Your friend,
    Jazmine

  2. The movie was kind of choppy. There was great acting, great sound effects,and great editing.There was some laghing in the back round.

  3. I liked how you followed with your script, how you expressed everything, and have an idea liek a competition.

  4. I think that the movie rocked and that had really great actors and you guys seemed really competitive and im sure that after that video you guys became best friends but im sure you already are

  5. Your message about cheating was very clear, and you had a solid plotline that was easy to follow. Your cuts between actors was a bit delayed to feel natural. Keep up the good work!

  6. The acting was great! It sounds like you and Kathryn are very competitive. You used a lot of expressions. Your narration is very clear

  7. I too have never also knew that my daughter’s class was so advanced in electronics before and how they knew mostly about the camera zooms.

  8. I liked how it was edited ,but who ever edited cut of Katherine’s line. The movie made really great sense.

    -Melissa

  9. ((NARRATION))
    (Today I found that Katherine was showing off. The hula hoop was almost stuck to her waist. I was ready to challenge her.
    _______________________________________________
    “Hey Katherine”
    “What”
    “I bet I can hula hoop longer than you”
    ” No you can’t”
    ” OK no offence but that shirt is sooo last season”
    ” Thats it! You’re on!”
    ” Melissa you wanna be the timer person?”
    ” Sure”
    ” Ready, Set, HULA HOOP!”
    (Both start hula hooping)
    ” Maybe if I cheat they won’t know”
    ( I scoot closer to her and my hula hoop hits hers)
    ” Oh No!”
    (Katherine kicks a rock at my feet, so I fall)
    ” Yes! I’m the champ!”
    “Both of you cheated so non of you won”
    “But Katherine didn’t cheat”
    “But she kicked the rock at you”
    (BELL RINGS)

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