“hey, Kathryn wanna get some ice cream ? ”, Melissa ask.
”No”, I said .
“You lost your homework again, right ? ”, Melissa said.
“Yah”, I said.
”Do you want me to help you?”, Melissa said.
“Sure”, I said.
”Did you check your backpack?”, Melissa ask.
“Wait,what’s that in your backpack ? ”, Melissa ask .
”My homework ?” , I yell.
“Thanks”, I said.
“What about the ice cream ? ”, Melissa ask.
“Let’s go to Baskin Robins”,I said
“okay”, Melissa said.
Storyboard originally submitted Nov. 9, 2009
It was interesting but some of the scenes were too long. One of the scenes had Emily stuck in it so we saw her a little bit. The other parts were great.
The movie was well edited.There were a couple of scence were Emily was shoing other than that the movie was great.
Your script seemed complete. We enjoyed the way you cut between shots. We plan to use your idea in our own movies.
You talked very low. The lines were said very clearly and made sense. Good framing.
I like how you did your movie. It was awsome.
I liked the way you cut through scenes. I also liked the way you gave us details. It reminded me of something I did before.
Melissa disappeared in the second scene. It made sense, and it was very well edited.
I liked how Katherine and I expressed our lines. We both need to be louder.
-Melissa
You had great shots. In about like 5 scenes you could see the director’s assistant.