Students will write a paragraph about why Nathan from “Storm Warriors” may make a good/bad surfmen. Each paragraph will include a topic sentence stating his/her opinion. For this particular paragraph, at least one EVIDENCE sentence will be included with one ANALYSIS sentence to support it. Students will provide a concluding sentence as well.
I think Nathan would make a great surfmen. One reason Nathan should be a surfmen is because he is good in medical situations. to study medical books made Nathan know what to do in bad events. Another reason the character should be a surfmen is he is brave. Risking his life for a child he was very brave. Nathan would make a excellent surfmen in my opinion.
You have a good paragraph Johanna. You have a great concluding sentence and the topic sentence, but there are just some mistakes that you made.
Nathan is a good surfmen. To study medical books made him a even better surfmen. Studying medical books made him a good or even better surfmen because he knew what to do when the child was going to die. He helped the child by putting or rubbing linseed oil on him. Although the others were saving the people’s lives, Nathan was doing something a bit more heroic. Nathan will make a great surfmen!
Nice pargraph Pedro. You indented good and your topic and concluding sentence are good.
Great paragraph Pedro but some sentences you’ll need to go back to. Nathan was rubbing linseed oil on the sailor not the child. But you still have a good paragraph.
I think Nathan will be a great surfman. He knew a lot of medical for. He knew them by studying medical books. He save a man because the man was injured and could of died because
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I think Nathan will be a good surfmen. Nathan reads medical books to study. He studys because he wants to be a surfmen and how to save people life. One day a big hurrican came and Nathan and his crew came to save every body on the boat Nathan saved Author and a child. Nathan is a very good surfmen.
I think Nathan will be a great surfman. He knew a lot of medical for. He knew them by studying medical books. He save a man because the man was injured and could of died because he had hypothermic. Nathan took off the man’s clothes and rub linseed oil on the man’s body so the man can get warmer. Nathan is going to be an excellent surfman.
Nathan would make a wonderful surfmen. Knowing, everything Nathan reads books to help people out when they are injured. He reads books he gets knowledge. At home, he read a medical book know, he can help people that got injured. Finally, the next one is that Nathan knows a lot of stuff to do. Nathan reads a medical book and he knows how to help out people. That’s why I think Nathan can be a good surfmen.
Nathan would make a great surfman. He knows what to do in a medical situation. Knowing what to do Nathan helped the crew stay warm. The character knew what to do because he studied medical books. During the rescue Nathan was brave. His fears were put away when he helped a child. Even though Nathan was afraid he did all he could to help. I think Nathan’s place is being a surf man
I needed off track time.You can spend time,relax,and good time.You can spend time with your family and you can spend time with your anties and uncles.You can relax.You can relax at home or at your anties house.You can alse good time.Have a good time or you can have a good time with your family.It is a inportent to have a off track.
Nathan would be a great surfman.Studying medical books.In the story Storm Warriors,one sailor named Arthur was injured and cold since Nathan studied medical books he knew what to do which was to rub linseed oil on Arthur’s body.Perfectly,Nathan would be a good surfman.
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Being off-track is so important . Because I could get more rest. Also I could finaly have fun. Usually I would go and see my grandfather in Anchorage,Alaska . I might even get to play outside. where I hope I am also going is to go and see my dad.I can probably even go to more birthday party’s. another reason why is because I could finally have a break from school. Sometimes I have to do something fun. “Oh” and I usually get a bunch of homework when I am off-track I guess I won’t be doing any of that.
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Nathan would be a good surman. To study medical books to be a surfman who can treat area that hurt. He knew that he had to treat the mans bleeding first then the hypothermia. He rubbed linseed oil on the man so he won’t be as cold. Nathan would be a helpful surfman is because he can do the medical work and the other surfmen can do the pysical work.Nathan would be a great surfman.
Nathan would make a wonderful surfman. The skills Nathan possessed will help shape him to become a great surfman. Studying medical books, Nathan was able to use the knowledge he acquired to save Arthur’s life. Unsurprisingly, he has the required concentration to be a surfman. At critical moments, Nathan is able to focus on helping Arthur even as nervous as he was. Does Nathan have what it takes to be a surfman, what do you think?
In my opinion Nathan would be a great surfman. Nathan could be the medical person on the team. If someone got hurt during a rescue Nathan can help that person. Nathan can help with non-physical things. If surfmen are swimming out to a wreaked ship Nathan can hold the rope.I’m sure Nathan can help in other great ways.
Nathan will make a good surfman. To study medical books you can help the area that hurts. He knows how to treat the mans bleeding first then you have to use hypothermia. He rubs linseed oil so the guy wont be so cold. Nathan would be a helpful surfman because he can do medical work. Nathan would make a happy surfman
Nathan would most likely be better off as a surfmen. One reason why Nathan is well as a surfmen is because of his actions. Nathan doesn’t “pay out the ropes” or do athletic acts, instead he does medical physics. Another reason why Nathan is good as a surfmen is because of his capabilities. Preforming a medical act, Nathan uses what he learned from the medical book,to save a person from a bleeding or from hypothermia. Would you also agree, that Nathan is much more suitable to be a surfmen?
Whoa… ending with a question. Risky, Elaine, but it works. Great job. I would rephrase the question without mentioning, “Would you…”
Would Nathan be much more suitable to be a surfmen?
There are many reason’s why Nathan should be a surf man.He should be a surf man beacuse he studied. Studding, medical books Nathan could help when someone needs medical attention. Bravely, the character took a chance.He took a chance because he went to go save a life when the ship crashed
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I think Nathan would make a great surfman. He is good at medical skills. He rubed lidseed oil on his legs , arms, and calves. He also knows that you treat the bleeding first then the hypothermia.
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Nathan would be a great surfmen. I think taht Nathan would be a great surfmen because he can save a person from a shipwrek. He saved a man by taking off the mans clothes and rubbing linseed oil on the man. Nathan wanted to save people from dying. I think Nathan was happy to save someones life. I think Nathan has a good ability to be a surfmen.