This subsection described the ways in which the Native Americans used every part of the buffalo. Our assignment was to write a summary. You can listen to each student read their summary as well! We’ll be doing this from now on to increase our fluency. Reading our writing aloud also helps to enhance our writing. Enjoy!
Podcasts recorded Friday, January 28, 2011.
The selection “From the Brains to the Tail” provides info on how indians use every part of a buffalo. First, indians use buffalo for food. They ate ribs,steak,jerky, and pemmican. Next, they use buffalo for food. They use it for robes,earmuffs,and mittens. Finally, they also use buffalo for shelter. Tipis that can withstand bad wheather such as snowstorm, thunderstorm, and hail. In conclusion, this paragraph describes all the uses of buffalo.
Andrew C. you were great but you could work on the expression. Other wise you were great!
You did a good job on the pauses. But you need to work on reading with more expression.
Thanks I noticed that too.
The selection ” From Heads to Tails” provides information how indians used the body of buffalo. First,all they provide food. They provide food like ribs, steak, jerky, and pemmican. Next they provide clothing. They provide clothing like robes, cloaks,caps,earmuffs,legging,and mittens.Finally they provide . They provide shelter like waterproof tipis that can withstand the worst weather. In conclusion, the selection it provides all the uses for buffalo.
The paragraph is great except for the go sentence. The title is selection is “From the Brains to the Tail.” One thing i noticed inyour audio is that you said next of all and that doesn’t really make sense.
Josh you did great on pausing but, you have to work on your expression a little bit. You have to read slower too.
Josh you read nice and smooth.But you read kinda fast.
You did good on the volume. But you should work on speed.
“From the Brains to the Tail” provides imformation on the uses of the buffalo. First, the buffalo provided food for the Native Americans. The food the buffalo provided was ribs, steak, jerky and pemmecan. Another buffalo use was for clothing. The clothing buffalo provided was robes, cloaks, caps, earmuffs, leggings and mittens. Finally, buffalo was used for shelter. The shelters were made of waterproof titis that could withstand the worst weather. In conclution, the selection discribes all the uses of the buffalo.
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Elexis,you read with fluency and you paused at the commas.
You did good on speed. You should work on reading more smooth.
This selection “brains to the tails”provides all the uses the indians use for buffalo .First of all , buffalo provided food. Indians used buffalo meat for ribs, steak, jerkey, pemmican. Also buffalo provided clothing. Clothing like robes, cloaks, hats, earmuffs,legging and mittens.Finally buffalo was used for shelter.Like waterproof tipis that withstand the worst wheather. To sum up indians describes all the uses for buffalo
Iggy, you read smoothly. Just put spaces in between commas and periods. In your topic sentence you need to capitaliz “Brains to the Tails”. Other than that you did great.
Iggy tou did good on reading smooth. You should work on volume.
Using All the Buffalo
The selection “From the Brains to the Tails” First of all, buffalo provided food for the Native Americans. The woman cut the meat and let it dry for days. When the days passed the sun-dried meat was called jerky. Indian woman mixed Jerky, pounded to pulp, with buffalo fat, and flavored. It was called pemmican. they also ate ribs and steak. Next, the buffalo’s skin was ised for clothing. They wore robes and cloaks around them to keep their body warm. Caps and earmuffs were used to keep their head and ears warm. Also they wore leggings and mittens to keep their hands and legs warm. Finally, the buffaloes were used for shelter. Waterproof tipis that could withstand the worst weather. To sum up, the selection describes the uses of buffalo for the Great Plains.
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I like that you used transitions and you discribed the uses very well in the paragraph but your go sentence doesn’t make sense and one of your sentences isn’t capitalized. In the audio, I liked that you used expression and you passed but you were a little hesitant.
Buffalo Uses
The selection “From the Brains to the Tail” provides information on how Indians use every part of he buffalo. First of all, buffalo provided food for the Indians. One type of food was ribs and steak. Another type was jerky. The last type was pemmican which was jerky with berries and nuts. Next, buffalo was used for clothing. They made robes and cloaks to put around them in the cold. They also made caps and earmuffs to protect their ears and heads. Leggings and mittens were also made from buffalo to keep their legs and hands warm. Finally, they made their shelter from buffalo. They made their houses called tipis out of waterproof skins that that could withstand terrable weather. In conclusion, this selection describes all the uses for buffalo.
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For the audio I like that a paused and that i had expression but i could improove on my fluency. In the writing I made sense and I used transitions but I used the word they to much in for my first, second, and third red sentences.
I like your transitions. You kinda read smooth. You stumbbled on “But”. Other than that your paragraph is great.
Nicole, you were great with using expression! The only thing you need to work on is volume. Other wise I think you did great with you’re paragraph.
From the selection ”Using The Buffalo”provides information on how indians use buffalo. First of all, the buffalo provided food. Ribs,steak,jerky and pemmican were from buffalo. Second,the fur provided clothing. The thick fur brought robes,cloaks,caps,earmuffs and leggings. Last,buffalo were used for shelter. They used water proof tipis that could withstand the worst weather. To sum up,the selection describes all the uses for buffalo.
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In your paragaph, I liked the transitions but the word Indians should be capitalized. For your audio, it was great that you used expression and you passed but but it wasn’t very smooth.
Serena, you did great on the volume. All you need to work on is reading with expression. You read exellent you should read aloud more in class!
The selection “From the Brains to the Tail” provides information on how they food. They provided ribs,staek,jerkey,and pemmican. Next, buffalo provided clothing. They used robes,cloaks,caps. Last buffalo provided shelter. They had waterproof tipis that could withstand the worst weather. In conclusion, describes all the uses of the buffalo
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Dillon you kinda read smooth. You could use More expression. In your conclusion sentence you could add a period.
Dillon you read nice and smooth.But you need to read with more expression.
The selection”Brains to tail”provides information on how Indians use every part of the buffalo.first of all,buffalo provided food.Like ribs,steak,jerky ane pemmican.The Indians ate roasted tongue,morsels,ribs,steak,jerkey and guts.second of all,the buffalo also provided clothing.The indians made winter robes,cloaks,bedding,caps,earmuffs,leggings and mittens.Finally,The indians made housesout of buffslo hide.Tipi’s provide warm winter homes, it was shaped like a cone so it could withstand extreme weather. To sum up, this selection describes all the uses of the buffalo.
Great paragraph and goood job stopping at the periods but you need to read with EXPRESSION.
The selection “From the Brains to the Tail” from the story “Buffalo Hunt” provides information on the uses of buffalo. First, the buffalo provides food. Ribs, steak, and pemmican.Second, of all,the buffaloprovideclothing. Moccasins, robes, and cloaks. Finally, the buffaloprovided shelter. Waterproof tipis that could withstand the worst weather. In conclusion, this selectiondescribes the uses of buffalo.
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This selection “From the Brains to Tail” provides information on how Indians use every part of the buffalo.First of all,buffalo provided food to the Native Americans.For example,ribs,steak,jerky,and pemmican.Second, Indian womens spent alot of their time making clothing.They made buffalo robes,cloaks,caps,earmuffs,leggings,and
mittens.Third, the Indians lived in tipis.It was warm and cozy.Also it was shaped like a cone,walls were waterproof,it can fit fifteen people,and it was easy to carry around.To sum up,this selection describes all the uses for buffalo.
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Ashely S. your recording was kinda smooth. When you paused, great timing. The expression was good. But you can space out on your paragraph.
I agree with Jasmin 100%. The audio is great and your expession was perfect but your paragraph needs to be spaced out.
The selection “From the Brains to the Tail” from the story “Buffalo Hunt” provides information on the uses of buffalo. First, the buffalo provides food. Ribs, steak, and pemmican.Second, of all,the buffalo provide clothing. Moccasins, robes, and cloaks. Finally, the buffalo provided shelter. Waterproof tipis that could withstand the worst weather. In conclusion, this selection describes the uses of buffalo.
Using All the Buffalo
The selection “From Brains to Tail” provides information on how the Indians use every part of the buffalo. The first thing is buffalo provided food. Indians ate ribs from the buffalo. They also ate steaks. Native American womens cut meat in half and hang to dry,called jerky. Dried meat pounded to pulp mixed with fat,nuts,berries and fruits,called pemmican,could last for years. Another use for buffalo was for clothing. For days,Native womens made buffalo hides soft and supple,and made to a winter robe or cloak. It could be cut stitched to make caps,earmuffs,leggings and mittens. Finally,the buffalo provided shelter. Buffalo hides made into a tipi,tipi was warm,shaped like cone so it can stand any kind of weather,hole at the top to let out smoke. To sum up,this selection describes all the uses for buffalo.
Cathy you were great reading aloud. You should read aloud more in class. I think you should work on is expression! Your paragraph has a couple of mistakes.
In th selection “From the Brains to Tails” provides information on how the indians used all the parts of the buffalo. First of all, the buffalo can provide food like ribs, steak, jerky, and pemmican. Second, a buffalo also was useful for clothing. It helps for clothes like robes and cloaks. Last, the buffalo worked as shelter for the indians. The skins were the walls of the cone-shaped tipis. To sum up, the selection describes all the uses of buffalo.
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Chelsea when you read it is smooth. Great pausing and you had a little expression but not really. Your conclusion and topic sentences were great. So was the paragraph.
The selection ”From the Brain to the Tail” provides infromtion about Indians that use ever part of the buffalo. First of all buffalo provides food.Like ribs, steak, jerky, and pemmicans. Second, the buffalo provides clothing. Robes and cloaks, hats, and mittens. Finally, buffalo weres used for shelter. Just like the homes they built like teepes. In conclusion, the selection desercribes the many way Indians use many stuff from buffalo.
The selection “From the Brains to the Tails” provides all the ways how the buffalo is use. First of all, the buffalo to provides food. The foods are pemmican, jerky, and the steaks and ribs. Second the buffalo provided clothing. Like the mittens,caps,earmuffs,and leggings. Third,the buffalo was use for shelter. The tipis was waterproof and thecould stand the worst weather.To sum up this selection, describes all the uses of the buffalo.
Ashley, your paragraph was great! I liked how you read very loud in the audio. You might concider reading with expression.
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I thought you read a little smooth. You didn’t pause at one of them. But the rest was great. You read with expression. In your topic you said “describes” when it doesn’t say that.
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You could work on spacing the periods and commas. Put spaces between your words. Other than that you did great.
The selection ”From The Brains To The Tail” tells how the indians use all the parts of the buffalo. First of all buffalo provided food. Buffalo provided food like ribs, steak, jerky, and permmican. Second they used the buffalo for clothing. They wore buffalo cloaks, robes, caps, earmuffs, leggings, and mittens. Last they used buffalo for shelter. they used the buffalo for tipis that can withstand the worst weather. To sum up they used all the resources of the buffalo.
I think you made a mistake. You put Josh’s voice on Jacob’s writing.
You’re right. I removed it. They both have the same initials.
The selection “From The Brains To The Tail” provides information on the uses of buffalo.First,the buffalo provided food for the native Americans INCOMPLETE
A’shaun, this incomplete entry is one of your best. The spacing is good. The spelling and grammar is great. Only the word “native” has to be capitalized. If you continue to keep writing like this, then pretty much all of your comments will be posted! Great work! : )
Mr. Alfonso came to my office at the end of the day and wanted to share something with me…the work all of you have been doing! WOW! Talk about impressive! I am thrilled to see the level of energy, thought, and quality put into the pieces you have posted. I love the preplanning and the oral sharing portion as well. You are a class or rockstars…can’t wait for future performances/presentations!
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Andrew read great and smooth , but need to work on expression.
The selection “From Brains to the Tail” provides information on the uses of buffalo. First, the buffalo provided food. They provided food like ribs, steak, jerky and pemmican. Another use buffalo was for clothing. The clothing they made was robes, cloaks, hats,and earmuffs,legging and mittens. Finally, buffaloes were used for shelter. They made waterproof tipis that could withstand the worst weater. This conclusion discribes all the uses for buffalo.
I think you did good reading smoothly.
I also think you did good pausing at periods.
I think you should read with more expression.
“Buffalos Provided Things for Indians”
The selection “From the Brains to the Tail” provides information on how Indians use every part of the buffalo. First of all,buffalo provided food. The food was ribs,steak, jerky,and pemmican. Next,buffalo provided clothing. Robes and cloaks protected the Indians body. Caps and earmuffs protected thier head and ears. Leggins and mittens protected thier legs and hands. Finally, buffalo provided shelter. The shelter was a tipi that provided waterproof walls that would withstand the worst weather. To sum up, the selection describes all the uses from the buffalo.
The article the hunt” tells about many ways to hunt buffalo. Theirs are six dirfferent ways ot hunt. Theirs a way you can sneaky and shoot arrow at the buffalo. The other way is to ride on hores and shoot arrow at the buffalo. The last ways is to confused them and drive them of a cilff. In conclusion, the story” The Hunt show” about the six dirfferent ways to kill buffalos.
Josh read great, paused, and with expression but read kind of fast. Writing was great made sense.
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I think you did good reading smoothly.
I also think you did good pausing at periods.
I think you should read with more expression.
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Writing Summary
I think you should capitalize in your topic sentence.
Dillion read great, paused, but needs expression.
The selection “From the Brains to the Tail” from the story “Buffalo Hunt” provides information on the uses of buffalo. First, the buffalo provides food. Ribs, steak,jerky, and pemmican.Second, of all,the buffalo provide clothing. Moccasins, robes, and cloaks. Finally, the buffalo provided shelter. Waterproof tipis that could withstand the worst weather. In conclusion, this selection describes the uses of buffalo.
The selection ”From TheBrains To The Tail” tells about the way they use the buffalo. First of all buffalo provided food for the Native -Americans such as ribs,steak,jerky and pemmican. Another use of a buffalo was for clothing such as robes,cloaks hats,earmuffs,leggings and mittens. Finally buffalo skin were used for shelter water proof walls for there tipi walls that could withstand any weather .In conclusion the selection describes the many uses of buffalo fo the great plains indans
The selection “From the brains to tail “provides in formation on the uses of buffalo. First, the buffalo provied food for the Native Americans Rib, steak, jerky, and pemmrcan. Another, use for buffalo was clothing. Robes, claks, hates, mitens, and leggings. Fillnally, buffalo were used for sheter. Water proof tipis that could with stand the worst weather. In conciusion the selection describes the many uses of buffalo.
The article the The Hunt” tells about many ways to hunt buffalo. Theirs are six dirfferent ways to hunt. Theirs a way you can sneak and shoot arrow at the buffalo. The other ways is to be on feet and yell and scream to confused the buffalo.Another ways is to ride on horse and shoot arrow at the buffalo. The second one is to ride on horse again and throw the sppear at the buffalo. The third one is to ride on horse and seround the buffalo. The last one is to drive the buffalo of a cilffs.In conclusion, the six dirfferent ways is to show you how to kill buffalos.
Serena you could read with more expression. Why did you run over the first comma? You did great on pausing on the other commas though.I liked how you spaced your words so it won’t be all squished. You shouldn’t put all your deatails together.
The selection “From The Brains To The Tail” provides information on the uses of buffalo.First,the buffalo provided food for the native Americans such as ribs ,steak ,jerky and pemmican. Another use of the buffalo was for clothing such as robes, cloaks, hats , earmuffs, leggins,and mittens.Finally,buffalo were used for shelter WaterProof tipis that could withstand the worst weather.In conclusion the selection describes the many uses of buffalo that were used by the Great Plains Indans.
In the selection from brains to tail provides imformation on the uses of the buffalo.First provided food for the native americans like ribs,steak,jerky,and pemmican.Another use for the buffalo was for clothing.They could make robes,cloaks,hats,earmuffs,and leggings.Finnaly,buffalo’s were used for shelter they can amazingly can make waterproof tipis that can withstand the worst weather.INCOMPLETE
Horray for buffalo chips!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Okay, sorry, now I am hungry. I hope I didn’t freak you out.
kyle you still check the blog? wow anyway great summaries. tell mr prior i said hi. 🙂