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  1. “Hey Katherine”, I said
    “What”,said Katherine
    “I bet I can hula hoop longer than you”,I said
    “No you can’t”,she said
    “Ok no offence but that shirt is sooooo last season”,I said
    “That’s it you’re on!”,She said
    “Melissa you wanna be the timer person?”,I asked
    “Sure”,she said
    “OK READY,SET,HULA HOOP!”,Melissa exclaimed
    (both start hula hooping)
    “Maybe if I cheat they won’t know”,I whispered
    (I scoot closer to Katherine and my hula hoop hits hers)
    ” Oh No!”,She screams
    (as she moves away she kicks a rock at my foot)
    (I move closer to her and trip on the rock)
    “Yes I’m the champ!”,She screams
    “Both of you cheated so none of you won”, said Melissa
    “But Katherine didn’t cheat”,I said
    “she kicked the rock at you”,said Melissa
    (bell rings)

  2. It was a very cold mornig. I barely got to the classroom. Suddenly, Johnny came up to me and ask if I wanted to play a game of Jenga. He got ready like it was a competition between me and him.

    “Hey Ben do you want to play a game of jenga” asked Johnny

    “Sure if you want to”answered Ben

    “Okay” Johnny said

    “Let’s rock paper sicors to see who is going first” Ben said

    (Johnny picks sicors)

    (Ben picks rock)

    “Well looks like I’m going first” Ben said

    “Your going down Ben” Johnny replied

    “Let’s see if you could beat me” said Ben

    (Ben and Johnny playing Jenga)

    (Ben wins the game)

    “Dam it I lost to you” Johnny said angry

    “Looks like I won the game” Ben said Happily

    “I’m looking foward to playing you next time” I said

    “Uhmm…okay” Johnny said wierdly

  3. “Hi,Emily,”said Araceli.
    “Hi,Araceli,”I said.
    “So, want to play connect four?”aksed Araceli.
    “Sure,”I said.
    “Let`s get started,”said Araceli.
    (So Araceli went to get the game.)
    “Hmm…..,”I said.
    “What?”asked Araceli.
    “I`m thinking,’I said.
    “Oh,”said Araceli.
    (So we kept playing until.)
    “I won yes!”yelled Araceli.
    “Oh, I didn`t know that,”I said.
    “Did you kept a secrect Emily?”asked Araceli.
    “Yeah, I wanted you to win the game because you never win me before,”I said.
    “Oh, thanks,”said Araceli.
    ‘So want to play it again?”I asked.
    “Yeah!”yelled Araceli.
    (We play and paly, until.)
    “I won again!”yelled Araceli again.
    (I fell asleep.)
    “Emily!”yelled Araceli angerly.
    “Emily I won the game again?” asked Araceli. ”
    What Araceli,”I said.”I won the game,”said Araceli.
    (I went to sleep again.)
    “Wake up please?”said Araceli.

  4. ”Araceli putting a coin in the slot.” ”Mr. alfonso putting coin into slot.” ”For a long time.” ”Hmmmmm.” said Araceli.” ”Araceli putting coin into slot.” “YES! I beat Mr. Alfonso!” cried Araceli.” “Noooooooo!” yelled Mr. Alfonso. “Great job Araceli.” “Thanks.” said Araceli.

  5. That morning was the most memorable day of my life! I challenged a person to Connect 4. Foolishly, I made the worst decision of my life. Let’s play Connect 4 Kathryn!”said Christina.
    Kathryn replies,”It’s on!”
    “Okay!”answered Christina,”Let’s start right now.”
    Kathryn grins,”You’re going to lose!”
    “Maybe,”Christina said unsurely.
    The game begins
    (Kathryn goes a black piece first, in the middle)
    (Christina goes a red piece at the end, on the right hand side)
    (Kathryn goes a black piece next to hers, on the right)
    (Christina goes a red piece on top of hers) (XCU of eyes)
    (Kathryn goes a black piece next to hers, on the left hand side) (XCU of eyes staring at each other)
    (Christina goes a red piece on top of hers)
    (Kathryn goes a black piece at the beginning,next to hers)
    Kathryn yells,”Yes, I won!”

  6. “Hey Litzy” said Diana “I guess you could beat every single girl, exept me”
    “No you can’t” replied Litzy
    “Oh yes I can”replied Diana
    “Ok than prove it” agreed Litzy
    “Ok” said Diana
    “Whoever gets to hundred wins” said Litzy
    “What?” Replied Diana “Hundred is too much, what about 50”
    “No” replied Litzy “Keep it or leave it”
    “Ok I will Keep it” agreed Diana ((And Litzy started first))
    (So we began)
    “1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10”said the rope holders
    (A minute later)
    “90,91,92,93,94,95” “Oh no I messed up” Said Litzy
    “Your turn Diana”
    “1,2,3,4,5,6,…”said the rope holders
    (Aminute later)
    “98,99,100,Winner” yelled the rope holders
    “See told you I could beat you” said Diana
    “Oh no” replied Litzy “This Never happens to me, haaa!!!”
    ((NARRATIVE))
    This Afternoon after school I found out that Litzy was beating every single girl in jumping rope, So I prepared to challenge her.

  7. [voiceover during it showing the building then does slow zoom towards window]
    me:”owwwww man,I hate inside recess.”
    [Johnny walks in]
    Johnny:”Why don’t we play connect 4.”
    [I turn around]
    me:”Your’e on”
    [C.U. of 1st chip falling] [music]
    [C.U. of 2nd chip falling]
    [S.S. of us playing]
    [E.C.U. of eyes] Johnny:”you will lose”
    [E.C.U. of eyes]Kyle:”Oh, I don’t think so”
    [slow mode of me putting the piece in]
    [Johnny goes]
    Kyle:As a matter of fact,[I go]I win.
    Johnny:”Nooooooooo!!!!!!!!” [with head down,Johnny bangs on table during line.]

  8. One day, I knew I had to chanllge someone, someone who is better than me.I knew what to do changlle the best in Jump Rope.I knew what to do battle someone name MELISSA!

    “Hey, Melissa,” I said
    ”What,”Mellissa said
    ”I chanllge you in doubble douch,”I said
    ”Why do I want to changlle you?,”Mellissa said
    ”Because, and also you going to lose,”I said
    ”okay ,bring it on,”I said
    “okay,”I said
    “hey, Christina ,wanna hold the jump rope,”I said.
    “Sure”,I said
    ”Ready set go,”said Christina,Lizty
    “2,4,6,8,10,11,12,14,15,16,18, 20”,said Lizty,and Christina
    ”I bet you are going to lose”, I said
    ”wow I don’t think I could bet her,”I said
    ”Ready set go”,said Lizty and Chritina
    ”If I cheat then she will lose”,I said
    ”2,4,6,8….”Christina and Liztysaid
    ”YES,I won I won”I said
    ”No,you didn’t won”Lizty said
    ”Sorry”I said
    ”It’s okay”,said Melissa(touching her leg)
    “Come on ,let’s go”I said (while I pick her up)

  9. “Hey do you want to battle me in

    Chess?” said Avina.

    ” Sure why not .” said Katherine.

    ” Were is it .” said Avina.

    “Isn’t it right there in the Game
    Box .” said Katherine.

    “Found it. ” said Avina.

    “Let’s begin with the game then .”
    said katherine.

    “Okay .” said Avina.

    “Do you want to make the first
    move.” said Katherine.

    “Sure , if u say so.” said Avina.

    “Then Avina began to check katherine’s man .”

    “Then Katherine check Avina’s man.”

    “Aww you won me .” said Katherine.

    “It’s okay you could win me next time .” said Avina.

    “There’s not going to be a next time .” said Katherine.

    “Why.” said Avina.

    “Because I’m moving.” said Katherine.

    “Today !” said Avina..

    “Yes I’m moving today .” said Katherine.

    ” Then have a good trip .” said Avina.

    “Katherine your going home early.” said Teacher.

    “Okay See You Never! said Katherine.

  10. “Hi Jazmine.”I said.
    “Hi Diana”.said Jazmine.
    “What are you doing?”I asked.
    “I’m practicing my drawing.”replied Jazmine.
    “Really can I see what your drawing?” I asked.
    (Jazmine shows me the picture)
    “Wow,that is so pretty but I could do better. I draw caricatures.” I bragged.
    “Oh,is that so.” said Jazmine.
    “Yep.”I replied.
    “Well then let’s see how “good” you are at drawing.” said Jazmine.
    “Fine, this is sooo a contest.”I said.
    “Oh it’s on!”announced Jazmine.
    “Ok.” I said.
    (Drawing our pictures and close-ups)
    “Ha,I bet you can’t draw better than this.” (Jazmine shows the picture)
    “Oh really can’t this beat it.”(I show Jazmine my picture)
    “Oh man I lost.” mumbled Jazmine.
    “What?” I asked.
    “I planned this whole thing and I even had my brother draw this.” admitted Jazmine.
    “Oh,so you cheated.” I shouted.
    “Yeah, but any way you won. Here’s the trophy.”admitted Jazmine.
    “Thanks, you did a good job.”I replied.

  11. “Hey, Crystina I bet I can beat you in Checkers “,said Jazmine.
    “I bet you can’t”, told Crystina
    “Yes, I can”,Told Jazmine
    “No,you can’t”said Crystina
    “Thats what you think but I know I can”, said Jazmine
    “Find then its on”, told Crystina.
    “Okay then”, told Jazmine
    (Setting up Checkers)
    “You wanna go first”, asked Crystina
    “Sure”, replied Jazmine
    (Started Playing)
    (Staring At Each Other)
    “Hey , who’s winning”, asked Crystina
    “Its a tie right now”,told Jazmine
    (On The Last Move)
    “Man, I lost “, said Crystina
    “Thats okay, you did your best”, said Jazmine
    “Okay”, replied Crystina

  12. Hay Crystina. I said.
    Ya. Said Crystina.
    Do you want to play Jinga. I assked
    Ok but how do you play. Said Crystina
    Well first you stack them up. I ansered
    Ok. She said
    And then you keep taking one block and then you put it one the top. I said
    So she said. I already know how to do that.

    {Rachel, you’ll have to redo this with the correct punctuation Wednesday. – Mr. A.]
    So I said. While your stacking the blocks on top you have to make sure that the tower dosen’t fall down.
    So thats the hard part right. She said.
    Right. I Said.
    O this is going to be easy. Said Cristina.
    Fine then if you think this is so easy then the looser has to do the Chichen Dance. I said.
    Bring it on. Said Crystina.
    [So the two competetive friends played.]
    Ha now you have to do the Chichen Dance. I said

  13. Melissa: Hey Katherine.

    Katherine: Yeah.

    Melissa: Want to compete against me?

    Katherine: Sure, why not I already know I can beat you.

    Melissa: Haha, I know you can’t beat me I’m the best in class.

    Katherine: I heard you.

    Melissa: I wanted you to.

    Katherine: Are we going to play or not?!

    Melissa:I just need to ask Christina and Lucy if want to hold the jump rope.

    Melissa: Hey Christina and Lucy want to hold the rope?

    Lucy and Lucy: Sure.

    Melissa: Ok, we are going to play Teddy Bear.

    Katherine: Who ever has the most counted wins.

    (The two competitive friends played)

    (Suddenly they both had a tie)

  14. Narrative: Saying my name, I heard some people saying they believe I can do it. During that cold windy day, someone my best friend Katherine challenged me in a jump rope game. I was surprised, my best friend Katherine! I was shocked. I thought for a second I couldn’t believe my best friend challenged me!

  15. “Hey Katherine”,said Melissa.
    “Yeah”,said Katherine.
    “Want to compete against me?”,said Melissa
    “Sure I already know I can beat you”,said Katherine
    “Haha, I know you can’t beat me , I’m best in the class”,Melissa said talking to herself.
    “I heard you”, said Katherine.
    “Uh, I wanted you to”,said.
    “Are we going to play or not?!”,yelled Katherine.
    “I just need to ask Christina and Lucy if they want to hold the rope”, said Melissa.
    “Hey Christina and Lucywant to hold the rope?”,asked Melissa.
    “Sure”,said Lucy and Christina.
    “Ok, we’re going to play Teddy Bear and Jumping in”, said Melissa.
    “Who ever has the most counted wins”, replied Katherine.

    (Narrative)
    Saying my name, I heard some people calling they believe that I can do it.During that cold, windy day someone my best friend Katherine challenged me in a jump rope? I was ,surprised my best friend! I thought for a second, My best friend challenged me!

  16. “Hi Gabby” I said
    “Oh hi Lucy” Gabby replied
    “Would you like to play CONNECT 4″I said
    SO WE SET UP THE CONNECT 4
    “So do you think your going to win?” She asked
    ” I am 100% sure I wil win”I said in a competitive voice
    “Oh WHATEVER!”She said loudly
    “Okaaaay anyway the game is set”I said
    THEN THE GAME BEGAN!
    (First I put mine in the far egde on the rite side)
    “that little move is not going to beat me” She said with a sigh”
    (next she droped it right next to mine)
    (I bit my lip and put it apove hers)
    (She thout to herself wow I might LOSE!)
    (she put hers right above mine)
    much time passed by and her and I were both down to or last chip and I had to wats to win so I was sure I was going to win) and i did
    (NARRATIVE)
    I was just sitting on my chair just waiting for someone to play with me .Nobody ever did so I dared to ask Gabby!

  17. “Do you have this yellow old folder?” I asked
    “Yes!” agreed Gabby
    “Are you tired of it?” I asked
    “Very”, replied Gabby
    “Then upgrade to a binder”,replied Crystina “You will be well organized.”
    (Gabby got a binder) (At school)
    “Hey guys look at this new binder I have”,bragged Gabby
    “Man,we wish we could have a binder like that”,said Lucy and Katherine.
    “Thats okay because I got you aguys a binder too”,replied Gabby.
    “Yes”,said the 3 friends.
    “Now we all have binders”, Gabby said.
    “Yay”,all 3 of them said.
    “Only for ages 7 and up”,anounced Crystina.

  18. (Narrative)
    Saying my name, I heard some people calling they believe that I can do it.During that cold, windy day someone my best friend Katherine challenged me in Doubledutch? I was ,surprised my best friend! I thought for a second, My best friend challenged me!

    “Hey Katherine”,said Melissa.
    “Yeah”,said Katherine.
    “Want to compete against me in Doubledutch?”,said Melissa
    “Sure I already know I can beat you”,said Katherine
    “Haha, I know you can’t beat me , I’m best in the class”,Melissa said talking to herself.
    “I heard you”, said Katherine.
    “Uh, I wanted you to”,said.
    “Are we going to play or not?!”,yelled Katherine.
    “I just need to ask Christina and Lucy if they want to hold the rope”, said Melissa.
    “Hey Christina and Lucy want to hold the rope?”,asked Melissa.
    “Sure”,said Lucy and Christina.
    “Ok, we’re going to play Doubledutch”, said Melissa.
    “Who ever has the most counted wins”, replied Katherine.

  19. It was an avrage day ,Then suddenly the phone rang and I answered and said, Detective’s agency.

    The man told me he had goten his lunchbox stolen.

    When I interviewed him he had told me he bought it for his son Jake .

    The next day I was walking to work and I saw the man as the victim described .

    I told him to freeze but he started running.

    He tripped up and I caught him and gave the lunchbox back.

  20. Mom can I take off this sweater now. I said
    No! Not until it’s summer. Said my mom.
    It’s the flu season and I don’t want you getting sick. Said my mom.
    But I already got my flu shot. I replid.
    I not just talking about the flu shot I mean other shots. Said my mom.
    Ya but I’m inside the house now can’t I take it off. I said.
    Plus this sweater is making me ichey. I said
    Well if you take it off you will catch a cold. Said my mom.
    I rather catch a cold then go to school. I said.
    But when you catch a cold you will regret not listening to me. Said my mom.
    Speaking of colds my friend got the chickenpox. I said.
    Lucky you did’nt get them. Said my mom.
    Mom I cant stop scratching. I said.
    Well go draw it will take you’re mind off of it. Said my mom.
    MOM! I shouted.
    What. Said my mom.
    I can’t stop scratching. I said.
    Ok, Ok you can take it off now.Said my mom.
    YOU HAVE THE CHICKENPOXS! My mom shouted.

    Rachel, you need to put the appropriate punctuation (Quotation marks) in the proper place.

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