Before/After: "Waking Up"

My alarm clock rings. I open my eyes. I sit up and get out fo bed. I walk to the bathroom, brush my teeth, and jump in the shower. I dry myself and put on my clothes. I walk downstairts, and sit down for breakfast. Mom has made me bacon and eggs. I drink my orange juice.

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12 thoughts on “Before/After: "Waking Up"

  1. My alarm clock rang like a dinosaur.Happily,I opened my eyes.I went to the bathroom and asked myself “why did i brush my teeth like a rock star?”I jumped in the shower like there was no tommorow!Silently,I walked downstairs like a ninja.My mom made me eggs and bacon.I asked her “why did u make green eggs and yellow bacon?”

  2. Loudly , my alarm clock rang . I opened my eyes I couldn’t see . I am blind . My brother took my blanket off my eye . I can see it is a miracle ! i sat up , running into the bathroom . In the bathroom I got my toothbrush and brush my teeth . I jump into the shower I saw a rat ! I yelled ahh ahh ahh ahh ahh ! Quickly , I got dressed I went into my room and jump into my bed . My brother went into the bathroom and took the mice . He said” I supossed to take care of the mice my mother maked bacon and egg . My mother , brother ,dad ,and sister ate it all . Ionly had milk.

  3. ” Ring ring ” my alarm clock ring . I open my eyes , sit up and get out of bed . I’ m walking into a bathroom to brush my teeths , i take shower and put on my cloths . I walk into the kittcen and get breakfast . My mom has mead bacon and egg .I dink apple juice whith ice.

  4. Loudly, my alarm clock rings. Opening, my eys I sit up and get out of bed. In nthe bathroom I brush my teeth and jump into the warm shower. I dry myself and put on my clothes and a shirt my friend let me borrow! Do I want breaktfast? Yeah, so I walk down stairs to have breaktfast. “Good morning, I made bacon and eggs,”said mom. I also drank some orange juice.

  5. My alarm clock rings and I get scared! I openmy eyes and I say “What time is it?” From my bed I got up and I look in the mirror and my hair is mess. Slowly I walk to the bathroom,brush my teeth and jump into the shower. Drying myself I put on my clothes. Walking down for breakfast. “What’s for breakfast” ,I asked my mom says,”bacon and eggs.”Camly I drink my orange juice.

  6. Loudly, my alarm clock rang. Still sleeping, I got out of bed. In the hallway I walked to the bathroom and took an hour finish. I got out dryed myself. I fell down the stairs! Mom asked,” What would you like?” I said ” Bacon and eggs with orange juice.

  7. Loudly, my alarm clock rings ,so fast.Hitting the alarm off, I opened my eyes . I walked towards to the bathroom and brushed my teeth ,and got into the warm shower.I am so tired!I got out of the tub and dry myself.Do I have to wear these clothes?”I’m so hungry,”iI said to myself.Mom cooked us breakfest .I ate eggs with bacon, and with orange juice.

  8. Quietly on a Monday morning my alarm clock rings and I get out of bed. When I got out of bed I walked to the bathroom and brushed my teeth and jumped in the shower. When I was doen taking a shower I dried my self and put some cloths on. I ran down stairs to eat breakfast Iwent to go sit down at the table my mom made fried eggs,sausage and bacon and a glass of chocolate milk.

  9. When my alarm clock rang I got very mad.I do not like to wake up from loud thing. Slowly, I got up and I opened my eyes. I was walking to the bathroom I found my tooth brush in side the toilet. Also it was not alone. Last I had taken a shower.

  10. One day I fell asleep, an then my alarm clock rings. Slowly I open my eyes open and get out of bed. Then I walk to the bathroom,then I saw a big spideran I said,awww that was a big spider! When the big spider came near me I started to scream then my mom heard me so she came in the bathroom and she started to kill it because it was a big spider.when she killed the spider I stared to brush my teeth.then, I jumed In the shower and got out.When I was finish I was brushing my hair.My mom was making breakfeast for me I came down stairs and my mom made me eggs,bacon, and pancakes an then she gave me orange jiuce and milk.

  11. When my alarm clock rung it rung so lod that I fell off my bed.I tried to open my eyes as it felt like they were glued together.I sat up and got off the floor.When I went to the bathroom to brush my teeth I found my toothbrush in the toilet with a floaty!I had to get a new toothbrush.When I was done brushing my teeth I jumped into the shower.I got out dried myself and put my school clothes on.I was still drowsy so walking daown stairs I rolled off and ended up with many bruises.Sorely I walked into the kitchen. My mom made me bacon and eggs. Since I was so hungry I took a big bite of some bacon.I guess it was to hard because all my teeth fell out.”mom all my teeth fell out I don’t think I could still eat my eggs!” I told my mom. It was bloody anyways.So I drank my orange juice and it turned bloody too.

  12. On Monday, morning my alarm clock rings the news goes on the bathroom door opens. Slowly, I open my eyes and roll off the bed. As I walk into the bathroom my robot brushes my teeth for me and slips me into the but I sliped and fell so I got a five inch cut on my leg the robot or (Zac E.) his name helped me up and fixed my five inch cut. After that I dryed my-self off with a extremly soft towel. Then put my clothes on. In the mean time I slid down a pole whie it dropped me on a slide. Eating my breakfast I got really happy for my first day of school (fifth grade). I went there in a sauser that can fly me any were even Outer Space (cool). I went to class when it was finshed had three pages of homework not bad right. When I went home I had dinner and a soft drink. Took a shower and went to bed. THE END!!!!!!

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