We went to the park today. It was sunny. Mom prepared lunch on the picnic table. My sister and I rode our bikes around the pond. My dad played catch with my brother. My mom called us in for lunch. We ate our sandwiches, chips, and lemonade.
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We went to the best park in California.At the park it was sunny.Why did mom prepare lunch on the biggest picnic table?My sister and I rode our bike around the pond that the locknest monster sleeps in!Happily,my dad played catch with my brother.”I love cookies” said Jonathan eating 35 of them.
Finally, we got to go to the park. Watching people play and jog, it was very sunny. At a picnic table mom prepared lunch, for us.”Lets go ride our bikes !” my sister said. My dad and my brother likes to play catch. ”Lunch is ready!” my mom told us. We ate our sandwiches, chips,and lemonade juice to drink. Before we were going home we all played catch.
Quickly , we went to the park today. Dangersly , the sun was putting me on fire . I had to jump in pond to get the fire out , I had to put on lotion. My mom prepared a special lunch for us . By he pond my sister and I rode our bikes around their. ”What are you doing Dad .” said Tyler . ”Playing catch with your brother,”said Dad. Calling from the park my mom made a lunch. Are we supposed to go to the party ? We will just stay at the park and enjoy our meal,hamburger,chips,and lemonade
We went to the best park in the world today! It was so hot every icecream melted. My sister and I rode our bikes around a pond filled with paranhas. POP, My tire went. Then I fell in the pond! “OW” I said ” AAAAAHHHHHHHHH” I said ” A pirannha bite my leg. Happily my dad was playing catch with my big brother. Suddenly, he heard me scream. Then he asked me “What happened?”” Nothing” ” Then why did you scream?” ” I don’t know” Then mom called us in. Quietly, we ate our sandwhich, chips, and drank our lemonade.
My family and I went to the park and birds said, “tweet-tweet” loveliy. We were walking to see if we could find a shadey spot. At the park we saw a tree that was big enofe and we sat thier. I asked my mom if I could play with my bike. I asked my mom where is my bike? Never mind I want ice cream! yum delishos!
Going to the park and I see my sister at the park . And is was sunny. Andmy mom cook stuff to us to eating. I was running quickly to go home and eat lunch. ”Auhhhhhhhhhh”. I see a tiger and they want to eat me?
I have to run now! And I run to my house. I said to my mom mom when I was running home I saw a tiger wanted to eat me.My mom said really I said yes keep me in the house because I’m scared of tiger.And I sat down to eat lunch.And I told my mom all alway to go home.
Cheerfully, my family and I went to the park and when we got out we saw brids singing,”tweet-tweet.” After we got out of the truck we took our bikes out of the trunk and rode them. “Are you wearing your helmates?”,our mom asked “Yes, we are wearing are helmates”,we yelled back. My Daddy and my other sister were playing catch with a football! Looking at the sun I thought it would be quite hot. Quickly, my faimly and I were raceing to ice cream and chips. THE END!!!!
Dreaming,I had a picinic on a snowey day. Preparing, mom called me for lunch. I rode my bike to the farm with my sister but she fell in the pond and scremed ‘aghhhhh’ and i heard quack quack moo moo. “Are we dreaming”,said my sister.We went home and ate BBQ . Slowly I left home
Quickly, my friends and I rode our bikes to the park. Talking to my friends we were talking about how fun it is going to be at the park next thing you know I here a ruff ruff and a cock a doodle dooo and my friend ses what is that sound! When we were playing tag I was going to tag my friend he screamed ahhhhhhhhhhh!!!!! When I tagged him he said all man. When my dad whistled for lunch we ate a grilled cheese and it tasted pretty good and we drank some koolaid.
Happily, we went to the park. “What a sunny day,”I said. On the picnic table my mom preapared lunch. Do you want to ride our bikes?Sure said my sister, so we rode our bikes around the pond. Playing cacth with my brother is what my dad was doing. By the picnic table, my mom called us over for lunch. We had my favorite, burgers that smelled good, crunchy chips and sweat, sour lemanade! Every chip I ate said “crunch”. I could hear the hambergers say “sss” on the grill.
Last Sunday my mom, dad, brother, sister, and I went to the park. It was a warm and sunny day. The park had a lot of ducks walking around the pond. My mom and sister had prepared lunch for later. My sister asked if we were going to feed the ducks. “I will have a lot of fun,” I said.Auhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh! My sister screamed when my sister got bit by a duck on her hand. Later we rode bikes the pond five times. Our mom called us for lunch we ate a sandwich,hotdogs,and drank soda. When my sister was walking POW! then my sister got hit with a baseball that my brother was playing with. I saw a duck with it’s head stuck in in side the gate pole. I was pulling it’s head out POP! the head came out of the poles. My brother asked how it’s head got in side the pole? “I do not know,” I said to my brother. Then we went home.
Happily,mom and I went to the park. Shivering my mom got swetters from the car. My sister was riding her bike around the park she heard quawks and ”tweet tweet”. At the park my dad and I played ball. And then quietly my mom and I went to scar my dad and he said Ahaaaaaaaaaa!!! Why did you scar me my dad said.And i seen lots of birds.We had lots of fun.
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Today we went to the park and I had fun. “It’s very sunny”, my mom said. Quietly my mom prepare lunch on the picnic table. Around the pound my sister and I rode our bikes whush I went fast.Playing catch my dad asked my brother, “Do you like school ?” Happily mom called us for lunch. Mmmm we ate hamburgers made by my dad, also we ate chips,and lemonade.
ly-Happily,Mr.Alfonso went shopping at the Apple Store with his daughters.
ing-Shopping at the Apple Store Mr.Alfonso bought many apples.
where-At the Apple Store Mr.Alfonso pushed his youngest daughter in her stroller.
dialouge-While they were walking one of Mr.Alfonso’s daughter said”Daddy I need to go potty right know.”
exclamatory-While Mr.Alfonso was walking he saw an apple that was bigger than him.
interrogative-Did Mr.Alfonso buy any green or yellow apples?
We wen`t to the park today it was sunny.My mom pepared lunch on the pinic table I said”mom could I have fried chicken.”mom said” NO.”so my sister and I rode our bikes around my dad was playing catch my dad said”wana play catch?”I said ”no”our mom said”time for lunch!”so we had chips and lemonade and it taste good.
Finally we get to a park it take two hour .Wating I and my brother need a biketo play but my dad not here i ask mom ”how long dad get here?” . when i look out at the big tree my dad are finally here . We ride a bike arou a park . And i smell egg whith rice . And my mom call ”it timefor dinner” said my mom . I ran to a table at a tree i ask my mom” what were have for lunch ?” . My mom said were get some rice , egg and qangtank it a VITENAME food. My mom ask me to call dad and my brother to come for lunch . When all my family are here we eat lunch . When I and my brother are done eating lunch . we go to a phaygour and we see ice crem i take my money out my bagand run to a ice crem car . The car are stop I ask my brother what to eat and i by some for him and my mom,dad for me . As we play little and we go home at 5 : 30 . It a long day I like to go to a park next year we go more.
At the park. Quietly I snuck up on a bird. Jumping I miss the bird and it pooped on my
head and I fell into the pond. My mom said ‘time to eat’ . So as I was getting out I
sliped back in. When I finally got out. My mom said ‘what happend? So we had to go
home.
Finally, I went to the park. Riding my bike to the park I fell down.I ask my mom “mom do you have a bandade?”yes I do.” In the park there where lot of small and big birds. ” I Want to eat ice cream. ” Wow a big bird! Then I went home and sleep
Our whole family walked to the beautyful park today.It was very sunny and hot I almost got blind!At the park my mom found a shady spot and stated to set up our lunch.While my mom was setting up or lunches my sister and I rode our bikes around the pond where we saw aligators in them.When we were riding on our bikes my sister fell in the pond and almost got eaten by an aligator but I helped her out.When my sister came out she was smelly,slimy,icky,and brown.she went to my mom to clean herself.While I was walking to my brother and father who was playing catchI thought too myself” I wondered why she looked so brown and slimy but all well.” Boredly I watch my brother throw it back and forth to my father.When my father threw it as hard as he could to my brother it hit his eye and he screached”aaaaahhhhh my eye where did my eye go aaaaaaahhhhh!”.he was laying on the floor and blood was shooting up.I was going to name it the blood of fountain until my sister got the eye and just plucked it in.When we were done with that we went to eat our lunch.We had salty chips,sandwiches,and sour lemonade.Too sour that my tounge fell off so I glued it back on.Right when we were done with our lunch we hurried up to go back home before anything bad happens agian.
Happilly I went to ask my Mom If we could go to the park. Going to my Mom and my Dad they were sitting down watching my brother use his bike around the park. Then we all started to play tag. Then I heard a dog bark and a train toot. Then the dog saw me and started to chase me. I ran all the way home and I was also yhelling “arghhhhh.” Then myt mom said what is going on and I said a dog is chasing me then she put me in the house and shut the door. After my Mom said to sit down for dinner. I asked her ” what” are we having for dinner I said to her”? Then she said we are having sandwiches, chips, and lemonade.